Everybody has their own dreams and I have my own dreams.
My dream is to become a footballer professional. It is important to me because it is the best way to revitalize my body, increase the country's name and make my parentshappy. It is also fun and fascinating hobby.
To realize this dream, I have been involved in football at school. It may be hard work butyou might also achieve the hard work. Therefore, I try hard to be representative of the school in football. I was selected to be representative of the school in football. I can play the forward position and the left wing. I want to be like the Arsenal striker Robin Van Persie because he is a great striker and professional.
When I had grown later, I want to represent the country to play in Asia and I also wanted to play football clubs in Europe.
I want to bring honor to the country and make my family proud of me. I hope my dreamwill become reality soon because I want to be a great football player one day.
My dream is to become a footballer professional. It is important to me because it is the best way to revitalize my body, increase the country's name and make my parentshappy. It is also fun and fascinating hobby.
To realize this dream, I have been involved in football at school. It may be hard work butyou might also achieve the hard work. Therefore, I try hard to be representative of the school in football. I was selected to be representative of the school in football. I can play the forward position and the left wing. I want to be like the Arsenal striker Robin Van Persie because he is a great striker and professional.
When I had grown later, I want to represent the country to play in Asia and I also wanted to play football clubs in Europe.
I want to bring honor to the country and make my family proud of me. I hope my dreamwill become reality soon because I want to be a great football player one day.
oo. i hope that your dream become real. nice one.
ReplyDeleteOkay. Honestly, the topic is clear for me to understand it and make me interest to read.
ReplyDeleteBut I want to give you a comment.
About your grammar, Azim. The using of " has ", " have " and " had " on your essay. For example, " I have ". I want to remind you that the uses of " have ", just for plural nouns. The sentence must be " I has " because the word " I " is one or singular. So, " has " is the most correct.
Okay? By the way, nice try. Keep it up. =)
What a great dream. Wish you luck.
ReplyDeleteHere are my comments just like always.
Because Nora Erlan had commented most of it. so I would probably just correct your spelling and words used.
E.g : at the first paragraph, not 'footballer professional', Azim but 'professional football player'.
And there is one more thing that I wanted to say as a friend before I forgot about it. Please elaborate your essay if you want to satisfied teacher. But still, nice try.
Thanks for your information..
ReplyDeleteI will try to improve my essay...