Wednesday, 15 August 2012

Love


LOVE
By: Azim

            My name is Zack Fred Bin Hack Eriz. I’m 17 years old and study at High School Musical. My house is located near my school that I study. I’m walking to school every day. I would like to share my love story to yours.
            She’s name is Melly Herina. First time I meet her at library. I see she’s with her friend reading a book. I start like her when I see her smile. Her smile is very interesting and sweet. It's an attractive smile made me attracted. At the same time, I tell to my best friend, Carles Merez that I falling love with someone. Carles’s laugh when he heard.
            On the next day, I meet her friend, Sally at the canteen. I told to her that I like to her friend, Melly. Sally laugh and say “Melly also like to you, Zack. She wants you to meet her and express your love to her.” I say “Okay and thank you, Sally.”
            After that, I go to the library to find her but she was not there. I’m so tired. Suddenly, I saw her walking alone at car park. I immediately run to her. She smiles when she sees my face. She asked to me “Why you running towards me?”. I say “I want to be frank about my feelings towards you, Melly. I really fell in love on you.” She smile and say “I also fell in love on you, Zack.”
            That’s all my love story that can I share to yours. 

1 comment:

  1. Here are some of my comments.
    1) "...and study at high school musical."
    study --> studies (refers to one person)
    2) "...my love story to yours."
    yours --> you

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